Talk:Swastima Khadka/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 09:52, 25 April 2020 (UTC)

Will be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 09:52, 25 April 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• "Khadka debuted as an actress from the 2015 teen romance Hostel Returns," - in
• "she appeared in 2017 romantic-drama" - appearance in the 2017
• "which received positive reviews from the critics." - from critics will suffice
• "In 2017," - That same year,
• "which became commercially successful, the film grossed 60 million" - grossing 60 million

Personal and early life

• "She completed her School Leaving Certificate (SLC)" - the wikilink should be on the term School Leaving Ceritificate and the acroynms deleted since they are not mentioned again
• "She told The Nepali Man that Miss Nepal was "a bit far-fetched for her". Khadka describes the experience as "a stepping stone" for her." - consider merging the two sentences together and shortening it accordingly
• Please briefly explain who Nischal Basnet is for those who are not informed

2015–2017: Film debut

• "a girl whose childhood friend's love for her isn't reciprocated." - is not per MOS:CONTRACTION
• "Her portrayal of Samriddhi was praised by critics, and one critic wrote," - repetition of the word "critic"
• "Nepali Sansar wrote," - The reviewer for Nepali Sansar' wrote,
• "but struggles with the International English Language Testing System (IELTS)" - you don't need the acroyns since they are not mentioned again in the article

2018–present: Nai Nabhannu La 5 and Bulbul

• "In the film, Khadka plays Ranjana, a teenage girl who shares a romance with Neer, played by debutant actor Abhisek Nepal." - the part she played is not explicitly mentioned by The Kathmandu Post but the Onlinekhabar source does. I suggest citation bundling
• "(twenty million)" - 20
• "Khadka then had a minor role in the film Chhakka Panja 3 (2018)" - later in the same year
• "where[23] she played the role of a Brahmin girl who becomes the love interest of a Janajati boy.[23]" - the first use of Ref 23 is incorrectly positioned and also not needed
• "Prakriti Kandel, writing for Nepali Times, praised her, writing:" - saying
• "After Bulbul, Khadka appeared in Hajar Juni Samma (2019), and Ghamad Shere (2019)." - eliminate the years in parenthese and add the following to the end of this sentence in the same year
• Delink Nishal Bashnet since he is already linked in another section

References

• References 7 and 24 should include the name of the language that the sources are written in
• Reference 13: "2017 Nepali Music Bestseller: Kutu Ma Kutu – NepaliSansar"." - the text in bold is not needed

Am going to place the review on hold to allow the nominator to respond/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 14:51, 25 April 2020 (UTC)

MWright96, All done. Thanks for the review. ~~ CAPTAIN MEDUSA^talk 15:18, 25 April 2020 (UTC)

• • @CAPTAIN MEDUSA: Another nice swift response :) Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 16:45, 25 April 2020 (UTC)

    • MWright96, Thank you. ~~ CAPTAIN MEDUSA^talk 16:58, 25 April 2020 (UTC)