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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Elmer White/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 14:53, 2 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Am reviewing this entry MWright96 (talk) 14:53, 2 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Lede

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  • White's nationality should be stated in the first sentence of the lede
  • Think the first and second paragraphs should be merged for flow
  • "he died of tuberculosis in March of 1872," - avoid using the date format highlighted in bold per MOS:DATESNO
  • "becoming the first player from a professional baseball league to die." - becoming the first professional baseball league player death.

Early life

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National Association (1871)

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  • Wikilink right field, outfielder, playing field and run to the relevant articles for non-Baseball readers
  • "His season was interrupted on June 19. The Forest Citys were playing the New York Mutuals, and White was playing catcher." - perhaps merge these two sentences together?
  • "and White was unable to play following the incident." - for how many games did White miss?
  • Write out about RBI stands for and wikilink the term for non-Baseball readers
  • "though Cleveland was defeated 9–7 by the Boston Red Stockings." - lost 9–7 to the
  • "White played over half" - more than
  • "of the game's" - think the word in bold is a typo

Death

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  • "According to baseball historian Frank Russo," - maybe add the name of Russo's book containing this information?

Relatives

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  • "At least one account indicates that White was also related to Warren White," - whose account exactly?

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above MWright96 (talk) 16:28, 2 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]