Talk:Kyle Palmieri/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 17:45, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

Hello! I'll be taking a look at this article for the January 2022 GAN backlog drive. If you haven't already signed up, please feel free to join in! Although QPQ is not required, if you're feeling generous, I also have a list of GA nominations of my own right here.

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

• IPA pronunciation needs a reference, I recommend this one  Erledigt
• Delink "American" per MOS:OVERLINK  Erledigt
• Sentence needed in the first paragraph that he previously played for the Ducks and Devils, especially since the Devils are introduced sans-location and link in the second para  Erledigt
• He split his first three seasons with the team split repetition of "split"  Erledigt

Early life

• Comma after "Smithtown, New York" per MOS:GEOCOMMA  Erledigt
• "moved to Smithtown for a few years" → "spent a few years in Smithtown"  Erledigt

Playing career

Amateur

• Spell out and link New Jersey Devils for "Devils-sponsored teams"  Erledigt
• "junior" should be capitalized in "16U Junior Devils"  Erledigt
• Comma after "New Jersey state final"  Erledigt
• Link hat-trick  Erledigt
• What team drafted him in 2008?  Erledigt

Anaheim Ducks

• Comma after "to his linemate Nick Bonino"  Erledigt
• Comma after "He was returned to the AHL to begin the season"  Erledigt
• "plus/minus" → "plus–minus" with the WL  Erledigt
• "Upon being returned to the AHL after playing in seven games, Palmieri was selected" → "After playing in seven games for the Ducks, Palmieri was returned to the AHL, where he was selected"  Erledigt
• Link AHL All-Star Classic  Erledigt
• "first Ducks rookie" → "first Anaheim rookie" to reduce "Ducks" repetition in sentence  Erledigt
• Some sentence should be mentioned about the end of the lockout and when he was promoted, as I thought at first that the hat-trick came when he was still an Admiral  Erledigt
• second-youngest Ducks subject-verb agreement or missing word  Erledigt
• Link "Western Conference Quarterfinal" to 2013 Stanley Cup playoffs  Erledigt
• Link "2013-14 season"  Erledigt
• "Ducks' topline" → "Ducks' top line"  Erledigt
• "home-town" → "hometown"  Erledigt
• Postseason stats for the 2014 playoffs?  Erledigt
• Any idea why he was placed on injury reserve in December 2014?  Erledigt

New Jersey Devils

• "second and third-round draft picks" → "second- and third-round picks"  Erledigt
• Comma after "re-joined coach John Hynes"  Erledigt
• Comma after "at the 2016 World Cup of Hockey"  Erledigt
• "while maintaining a shot-percentage of 13.5%" → "while maintaining a 13.5 shot percentage."  Erledigt
• "Upon rejoining the Devils, Palmieri reached the 500-games plateau" rejoining them after what? (The All-Star break, possibly?)  Erledigt
  • It's the start of a new season. I will make it more clear
• Stats for the 2018-19 season?  Erledigt

New York Islanders

• In his debut game against the Flyers on April 9, Palmieri became the 512th skater to appear in an Islander regular-season game. Trivia  Erledigt
• "In the Islanders final" → "In the Islanders' final"  Erledigt
• "post-season goal" → "postseason goal"  Erledigt
• Mention that the Isles lost to Tampa in the finals  Erledigt

Personal life

• Link Mattituck, New York  Erledigt
• Link United States Army, New York Army National Guard, and United States Army Rangers  Erledigt
• Also, "ranger" should be capitalized  Erledigt
• ""who best exemplifies leadership qualities on and off the ice and has made a noteworthy humanitarian contribution in his community."" → ""who best exemplifies leadership qualities on and off the ice and has made a noteworthy humanitarian contribution in his community"." per MOS:LQ  Erledigt

References

• "The Athletic" should be the work, not publication, and should have "|url-access=subscription"  Erledigt
• Riverhead News Review, The New York Times, The Hockey News, and Sports Illustrated should all be work, not publication  Erledigt
• Additionally, "Sports Illustrated" should be in the publisher parameter of The Hockey News  Erledigt
• Per WP:ALLCAPS, [34] should be in title case  Erledigt
• "nj.com" is actually the website for The Star-Ledger, so that should be the work param  Erledigt
• Same for "Syracuse.com" and The Post-Standard  Erledigt

General comments

• Images are properly licensed and relevant
• No stability concerns in the revision history
• Earwig is being slow af right now so I'll check it later
• Hey Drake... where's the international play section?  Erledigt

Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments, you know the drill by now. — GhostRiver 16:41, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

GhostRiver, All issues have been addressed. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 17:38, 14 January 2022 (UTC)

Everything looks good now, happy to pass! — GhostRiver 03:52, 15 January 2022 (UTC)