Talk:Music in the movement against apartheid
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[edit]I normally saw "anti-apartheid movement" in US references. Is that the more common usage in the Commonwealth as well? If so then this should probably be renamed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:38, 25 October 2017 (UTC)
- @Sturmvogel 66: I've seen both used by the sources. "Anti-apartheid movement", though, can also mean a specific divest-boycott advocacy organization of the time; this title seems less ambiguous to me. Vanamonde (talk) 04:51, 25 October 2017 (UTC)
- OK, just thought I'd ask.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:23, 25 October 2017 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Freikorp (talk · contribs) 04:36, 30 October 2017 (UTC)
I've had my eye on this for a while; might take some time due to the length. Don't feel obligated but I have a GAN as well if you're interested. Freikorp (talk) 04:36, 30 October 2017 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review, Freikorp. As you may have noticed, I'm on break, so this might take me a few days: I hope that's okay. Cheers, Vanamonde (talk) 14:46, 2 November 2017 (UTC)
- No worries, take your time. I didn't check your page before starting the nomination, so I'm happy for this to remain open. Freikorp (talk) 21:08, 2 November 2017 (UTC)
- Is it reasonably well written?
- "system of racial segregation,[2][8] Black South" - Either need to remove the capital in black or change the comma to a period
- Changed
- "led partly by a campaign of the African National Congress to increase" - at this point the abbreviation ANC has already been introduced. I would expect to see it used here, or are you deliberately spelling it out as it's the first mention in anew section?
- Deliberate: there's a lot of abbreviations, and I want to make sure the reader is not lost among them.
- "As the government grew increasingly harsh in its response to growing protests, the resistance shifted from being completely non-violent towards armed resistance." - This sentence reads awkwardly; two uses of grew/grow but more importantly two uses of resistance. At least change the latter.
- Erledigt
- "raise awareness of apartheid, gather support, thereby driving political change" - This doesn't seem right. How about "gathering support and driving political change"?
- Rephrased
- "consisted of a few South African performers" - Would it be easier just to say "several"?
- Erledigt
- "and lasted until 1980" - I'm not liking this choice of words. How about "and disbanded in 1980", or something similar?
- Erledigt
- "Major protests took place after the inauguration of a "Tri-cameral" parliament in 1984" - can you explain what this means?
- Sure, added a parentheses. Basically a parliament which gave other POCs representation, but not black people.
- "triggered a number of celebratory songs, as well as the "peace song", to which a number of artists contributed" - This is intriguing, can you expand on this "peace song"?
- I've added a little detail; there isn't much on the content of the song, though
- I'd introduce Trevor Huddleston briefly, maybe just say English Anglican bishop Trevor Huddleston ...
- Erledigt
- "The Graceland Tour included Miriam Makeba, another musician known for her anti-apartheid music." - Makeba has been introduced by this stage, there's no need for anything after the comma.
- Rephrased
- "reaching #4 in Australia, #10 in Canada and #21 in" - see MOS:HASH
- Fixed
- "A song very popular with younger audiences ... as a b-side to their extremely popular" - I'd drop the terms 'very' and extremely' as POV. If necessary, say something about what the songs accomplished, such as chart position or platinum certification etc etc.
- Removed and rephrased; I'll see if I can find info on the chart positions, though it might be too much detail for here.
- "Music review website AllMusic describes the music" - Three uses of' music' within seven words reads poorly.
- Switched one of them
- "often were arrested" - This doesn't sound right, how about "were often arrested"?
- "Lucey himself abandoned his musical career" - Is there any follow up on this; what became of Lucey?
- Not much, I'm afraid. I'll keep looking, but the basic sources don't seem to have it.
- "an individual could be jailed for five years for owning a copy of it" - this makes me very curious, were owning copies of other songs a jail-able offense or was this a unique case?
- I'll look, but this is tricky, because there's no easy way to search for this. There's no other instance mentioned that I recall, but I also think it's very likely to have been a common situation.
- "Michela Vershbow writes" - Who is Verhbow and why should I value his opinion? Perhaos mention what journal he is writing in at least. I.e 'Writing in the Inquiries Journal,, Michela Vershbow ...
- Erledigt
- "system of racial segregation,[2][8] Black South" - Either need to remove the capital in black or change the comma to a period
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- A. Has an appropriate reference section:
- B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
- Ref 37 is dead, though there's an archive version available here: [1]
- Fixed, thanks
- Ref 37 is dead, though there's an archive version available here: [1]
- C. No original research:
- A. Has an appropriate reference section:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. Major aspects:
- B. Focused:
- A. Major aspects:
- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail: While I'm certainly not a subject matter expert, I see no major issues or gaps in this article. Earwig's copyvio finds one match at above 60%: [2] - I'd try and trim that down a bit. Overall I'm very impressed with the amount of research that has clearly gone into this. Looking forward to passing once minor concerns are addressed. Freikorp (talk) 09:41, 30 October 2017 (UTC)
- @Freikorp: Thanks a lot for the review. It was indeed a lot of work! I think I've addressed all your points: take a look. With respect to Earwig's result: this is tricky, because most of the hits are names, or quotations. I've rephrased a couple of the other instances: the last couple I feel I should not change, as any other version is going to be a sentence that is harder to read. Regards, Vanamonde (talk) 15:34, 5 November 2017 (UTC)
- Well done. Passing. If I were you I'd nominate this for FAC immediately. Let me know if you do and I'll happily support it. Freikorp (talk) 22:15, 5 November 2017 (UTC)
- Many thanks, Freikorp. I do hope to send it to FAC soon; but apart from the fact that I'm busy in RL, I have a solo nom pending at FAC at the moment, and also have a source I wish to go through again (Gwen Ansell's Soweto Blues) which I did use, but did not go into in great detail. Of course, the topic is a large one, and I don't think it is possible to cover every source, but this one seems a seminal work, and I'd like to go through it. Regards, Vanamonde (talk) 12:08, 6 November 2017 (UTC)
- Well done. Passing. If I were you I'd nominate this for FAC immediately. Let me know if you do and I'll happily support it. Freikorp (talk) 22:15, 5 November 2017 (UTC)
- @Freikorp: Thanks a lot for the review. It was indeed a lot of work! I think I've addressed all your points: take a look. With respect to Earwig's result: this is tricky, because most of the hits are names, or quotations. I've rephrased a couple of the other instances: the last couple I feel I should not change, as any other version is going to be a sentence that is harder to read. Regards, Vanamonde (talk) 15:34, 5 November 2017 (UTC)
- Pass or Fail: While I'm certainly not a subject matter expert, I see no major issues or gaps in this article. Earwig's copyvio finds one match at above 60%: [2] - I'd try and trim that down a bit. Overall I'm very impressed with the amount of research that has clearly gone into this. Looking forward to passing once minor concerns are addressed. Freikorp (talk) 09:41, 30 October 2017 (UTC)
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