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Good articleNels Nelsen has been listed as one of the Sports and recreation good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Article milestones
DateProcessResult
March 2, 2011Good article nomineeListed
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on February 23, 2011.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that Nels Nelsen, at the time holder of the world's longest ski jump set at Big Hill, was not allowed to participate in the 1928 Winter Olympics because officials thought it inappropriate for an athlete to work for his fare on a freighter?

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Nels Nelsen/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Wizardman Operation Big Bear 03:58, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be reviewing this article. Overall it's good, but I have a few concerns:

  • "Despite being holding the world record at the time," take out being
  • "Nels married Emma Pickard, with whom he had ten children." first name usage is discouraged, just use Nelsen.
  • "who's flexibility made it easer to participate in tournaments." whose flexibility
  • "He moved to North Vancouver where he raised his family." any time period on that? as is it just seems thrown in.
  • "Among his methods to improve his jumps," comma not needed
  • "sick with the influenza," the not needed
  • "After his accident, he started working to established" you mean 'working to establish' the ski club, or is there a different meaning? Either way, needs rewording.

I will put the article on hold and will pass it when the issues are fixed. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 03:58, 1 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Everything has been seen to, except the move to North Vancouver. Thanks for taking the time to review the article. It's my first sports bio, so it has been new ground for me. Arsenikk (talk) 07:09, 2 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
No problem; everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 15:40, 2 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]