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Hello, I was assigned to do a peer review on your article for our film class. To improve on your article I have a couple of suggestions and they are as follows: I would recommend revisiting the title of your article as it can be slightly misleading. Is the article about the documentary "She's a Boy I know" or is it about the filmmaker Gwen Haworth? Secondly, I would suggest adding more sources for your article as you risk it getting removed by the site editors for not having enough information about both the film and/or the filmmaker. I would also like to recommend adding more headings and sources as you have the risk of having your article removed by the site editors. Finally, you will notice that I have added some additional readings to the bottom of your article which you may use to further expand on your topic. Signed, Deloros.ford94 Deloros.ford94 (talk) 18:01, 31 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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I have concerns. Your sandbox is well thought out, and has a lot of very detailed knowledge of Gwen Haworth. The information there could be rationalised and organised into a comprehensive article about Gwen Haworth and her life. The movie She's a Boy I Knew made by Gwen Haworth is a good beginning and framing structure to talk about and bring more evidence forward on Gwen Haworth's life, as you did in your sandbox. But your actual article on the wiki is only about the film, significantly shorter and has almost little to no details from the sandbox. Why? the sandbox is great; it has a good lead, it's well written, it could maybe benefit from a few more section headers, to spread the information out easier, and more info about her whereabouts after Fucking Different XXY from 2014 would be nice, but it's got great refences and great detail. It's a shame to see such a great article in your sandbox, reduced to nothing for the actual wikipage. Nosebleedy99 (talk) 18:59, 27 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]