Talk:Typhoon Nelson (1982)

Typhoon Nelson (1982) has been listed as one of the Natural sciences good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Review: June 25, 2014. (Reviewed version).

Weather: Tropical / Western Pacific Low‑importance

	Weather portal This article is within the scope of WikiProject Weather, which collaborates on weather and related subjects on Wikipedia. To participate, help improve this article or visit the project page for details. Articles Requested Project Resources Become a Member Project Talk Assessment A-Class Alerts WeatherWikipedia:WikiProject WeatherTemplate:WikiProject WeatherWeather articles
Low	This article has been rated as Low-importance on the project's importance scale.
	Tropical cyclones portal This article is supported by WikiProject Tropical cyclones (assessed as Low-importance).
	This article is supported by the Pacific typhoon work group (assessed as Low-importance).

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Typhoon Nelson (1982)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 15:06, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Nelson originated from a tropical disturbance southeast of Guam towards the end of March. " - March 19 isn't toward the end of March
- Fixed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Although the system was initially poorly organized, the system "
- Made the second one "it". Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane
Why not mention peak winds in lede?
- I hate doing this, but added, because it should be there. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"eight of which" - use "whom" when it's about people
- Fixed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Ten hours after the TCFA" - which you never mention
- Noted. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Early on March 19, the JMA classified the system as Tropical Storm Nelson." - at that time, the JTWC was responsible for naming. Maybe just say "classified the system as a tropical storm."?
- Good call. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"more conductive conditions" - did you mean "conducive"?
- That works. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
" and by that afternoon" - you never mention a date in that paragraph
- Noted. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"both the JTWC and JMA increased the intensity to 195 km/h (120 mph)" - not according to the infobox
- See below. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"the JTWC indicated that Nelson strengthen slightly on March 25, and attained winds of 185 km/h (115 mph)" - I think you have these wind speeds messed up, as 195 is obviously bigger than 185 :P
- Reversed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Thereafter" - is the second sentence in a row having that word (The other being "Shortly thereafter"). Try changing it up
- Better? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"the JMA had lowered the winds of 100 mph (160 km/h)." - I think you mean "to", not "of". And why mph first?
- I fixed both. Regarding the second, I always write everything in mph or knots first, then change it when I GAN it. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Considered a "pre-season" storm by newspapers, Mamie required storm warnings for parts of the nation, which were broadcast via radio." - this article is about Nelson
- I put the wrong tropical cyclone down :P It is Nelson. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"A total of 1,261 dwellings were leveled,[12] including 703 houses were destroyed" - you don't need the 2nd "were" if you have "including"
- Fixed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"all but 45 of the town's 600 houses were demolished" - you need "and" here
- Fixed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"A total of 165,462 persons evacuated to shelters;[13] approximately 83,000 of which were homeless." - change semicolon to comma, and, once again, use "whom" for people. Does this mean they were homeless when they evacuated, or they became homeless due to the storm?
- Did both, and in answer to the third, it's probs the latter. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Widespread power outages occurred." - pretty short sentence
- I merged this and the one below it. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Bridges were washed away." - so is this
"Eight of the casualties were due to drownings" - I'm sure more were from drowning, if there were over 50 deaths
- Put "at least". Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I think there might be an issue with the damage total. Ref 6 suggests 147 million in pesos, right? Well, you should fix the link to Philippines Measuring Worth to 1982, as it says 8.54 pesos per US dollar, which would be $17.2 million. That's far less than what you said.
- I can't do math here I guess :P I trust you and changed it. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

All in all, the article is decent, just a little rough around the edges. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 15:06, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]